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06-07-2010, 02:42 AM
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RE: Home Run - Chapter 5
Another nice one TL.
 I like how you are addressing the thoughts and feelings of the secondary characters: Ros and Scarlet. I have always felt that if the world surrounding the main characters is well developed, stories feel more truthful. Having Ruth leaving George alone in "their new but cold bed" is great. I'll bet Harry's bed isn't cold!  I also like how Ruth is working on instinct with contacting Harry. They are just drawn together without thought. And then of course as soon as she has done it she starts to think about it and second guesses herself. Perfect!
Now cracks a noble heart. Good-night, sweet [Spooks]; And flights of angels sing thee to thy rest. ~Wm. Shakespeare, Hamlet |
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