False Omen Ch. 8

[A Cousin]

I. Love. This. Story!

I read it first on fanfic before finding this forum and it was one of the few that really stuck with me long past reading it and many others. Most of them get read and then fade into the abyss that is my brain. Garbage In. Garbage Out. It stuck with me because it's like watching an actual episode. There is a really nice balance between plot and character. You mesh information that is already a given in the show with new stuff added by you very nicely.

Not that I would really know any better, but the plot was plausible and well constructed. All the right terms were in all the right places. You didn't try to complicate it too much. The reader goes along on the journey of discovery with the characters.

You have the tone of the existing characters down cold and Bushra is as vibrant and well drawn as the actual Spooks characters. I like how Ruth reacted as interrogator and in the field. Sure, she's getting her a** kicked, but she is proving something to herself and developing beyond the life of the show. I like the gentle and tasteful way you resolve the H/R relationship. The covert reference to Harry asking Ruth if she still sings from 8.8 is inspired. I like that it is a beginning. It *could* have ended at chapter 7, but thanks for making us happy!

Have you ever thought of becoming a screen writer or playwright?